Journal: Evaluation of Commentary

The commentary of the passage starts right away and does not let me get a feel as to what the writer feels towards this neither did it let me get a better feel as to what he was going to be diving into. I am not saying that the writer did not do a good job, its just that the overall flow and introduction could have used a little bit more editing and more word choice. I did, although, find some grammatical errors that could have, as I said before, been fixed with some more peer editing. Overall, I think this could have been put a little more time into; but they thought it out a lot and I think almost all o their points did make sense, and they did well.